Friday, November 21, 2014

Draft of written speech

Opening paragraph
I believe that people need to be more aware of the affects of concussions. My story: I got my concussion on April 19th, 2014. I was at a tournament in Philadelphia playing for my husky volleyball, my club team. We were playing a team from Baltimore and they had huge girls who hit very hard. One girl went up to hit and hit me straight in the face with the ball and I fell down and was on the ground for a long time. My mom and sister rushed over and I went to the trainer at the tournament. They immediately made me leave the gym and leave Philadelphia as a whole because I would not be able to play the rest of the weekend. I was not allowed to watch my team finish their tournament. Everyone knew, on impact, that I was concussed. During that game, I was being recruited to play college volleyball. After going to multiple doctors, I was told I will never be able to play volleyball again. But, after begging and begging, my neurologist allowed me to play for my high school team my senior year. 

Body Paragraph
Marc Savard is a hockey player in the NHL. He is one of many hockey players who suffered from concussions. Mark Savards story: Mark Savard is one of many hockey players who suffered from a major concussion. His story is similar to mine. On March 7, 2010, Savard stepped on the ice for the first time since he last got injured in January of the same year. He ended up getting a concussion in the third period of that game, but eventually recovered. On January 23, 2011, Savard then suffered a second concussion on a hit by former Bruin Matt Hunwick in a game against the Colorado Avalanche. On February 8, 2011, the Bruins opted to shut Savard down for the season after he received his second concussion in ten months. The Bruins went on to win the Stanley Cup, defeating the Vancouver Canucks in seven games. Due to recurring symptoms of post-concussion syndrome, Savard was not able to travel to Vancouver to take part in the on-ice victory celebration with his teammates, but he was able to join them back in Boston for the official victory parade. This is important because Savard wasn't even able to watch his team in the Stanley cup finals.


Statistics:
  • 50% of "second impact syndrome" incidents - brain injury caused from a premature return to activity after suffering initial injury (concussion) - result in death. This is important because it shows how severe concussions are.
  • 400,000 brain injuries (concussions) occurred in high school athletics during the 2008-09 school year.this shows how affective concussions are to young high school athletes.
  • 15.8% of football players who sustain a concussion severe enough to cause loss of consciousness return to play the same day. This shows that people don't take action right after impact and continue to play through their injury which just makes it worse.
  • High school athletes who have been concussed are three times more likely to suffer another concussion in the same season. This shows that the more concussions you have, the more prone you are to getting them.

Conclusion
In conclusion, people need to take concussions more seriously. People over look their symptoms and don't get help. Something I want everyone to take away from this is: don't take concussions lightly and let yourself heal before going back to your sport. What's more important? Finishing out the game or living a more healthy and safe life? 

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